Situation:
One of the best strategies to improve your
writing skill is to ask someone else look at your writing; many people do not
see their own mistakes. In this exercise you are assigned to read one of your
classmates’ blog and to evaluate it.
Instructions:
1.
Enter
to Alejandra’s class blogs.
2.
Read
all the information in the blog.
3.
If
you find any mistake, please write in comments your correction.
4.
Fill in the Rubric to evaluate writing.
5. Write your comments about this work
in one or all the pages of the blog.
THESE ARE YOUR PEER-CORRECTIONS AND PEER-EVALUATIONS
Students’ names: Carlos and Mateo
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Date:
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%
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The members of the group are able to:
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Poor
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Needs improvement
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Fair
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Good
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Outstanding
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Total
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20
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Include
information about members’ profiles, city’s profile and
introduce their blog.
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1-4
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5-9
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11-14
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15-17
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18-20
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5
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20
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Write a
clear and coherent paragraph about their profiles.
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1-4
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5-9
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11-14
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15-17
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18-20
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14
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30
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In the city’s profile, they write clear and coherent information about location, population,
landscape, weather, tourist attractions, food, music, sports, festivals, art
and religion.
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1-8
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9-15
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16-19
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20-24
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25-30
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5
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||
20
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Produce some
structures worked in the course such as: (1) I am ____years old; (2)
sentences in simple present, e.g. I like reading___; (3) negative sentence e.g. I don’t like…; (4) possessive
adjectives, e.g. Its capital is…
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1-4
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5-9
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11-14
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15-17
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18-20
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8
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10
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Include
images, pictures, videos and visual aids that help readers understand the
information.
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1-2
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3-5
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6-7
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8
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9-10
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4
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Comments: the blog needs improvement; there are many
mistakes in his writing and coherence. Besides, his appearance is poor, they
don´t show videos, images, tipical food, touristic places, festivals and
religion, etc. only they talk about his population and the botanic garden. on
the other hand, the Members' profiles are fine.
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Final score:__36________
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Students’ names: Carlos Durán and Mateo Quintana
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Date:
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%
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The members of the group:
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Poor
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Needs improvement
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Fair
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Good
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Outstanding
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Total
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20
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Include
information about members’ profiles, region’s description
and an introduction of their blog.
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1-4
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5-9
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11-14
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15-17
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18-20
|
9
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20
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Write a
clear and coherent paragraph about their profiles.
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1-4
|
5-9
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11-14
|
15-17
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18-20
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17
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30
|
In the region’s description, they write clear and coherent information
about general facts (location, population, weather, lifestyle), where to go,
what to eat and what to do.
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1-8
|
9-15
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16-19
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20-24
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25-30
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8
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20
|
Produce some
structures worked in the course such as: (1) I am ____years old; (2)
sentences in simple present, e.g. I like reading___; (3) negative sentence e.g. I don’t like…; (4) use of
adjectives.
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1-4
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5-9
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11-14
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15-17
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18-20
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8
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10
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Include
images, pictures, videos and visual aids that help readers understand the
information.
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1-2
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3-5
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6-7
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8
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9-10
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7
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Comments:
YOU DIDN’T WRITE THE INTRODUCTION OF YOUR BLOG. YOUR DESCRIPTION IS VERY POOR
AND THERE ARE MANY GRAMMAR AND SPELLING MISTAKES.
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Final score:_____49/100______
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Students’ names: Jazmin, Jordy, Camila, Alejandra Ospina's blog
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Date:
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%
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The members of the group:
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Poor
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Needs improvement
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Fair
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Good
|
Outstanding
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Total
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20
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Include
information about members’ profiles, region’s description
and an introduction of their blog.
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1-4
|
5-9
|
11-14
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15-17
|
18-20
|
9
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20
|
Write a
clear and coherent paragraph about their profiles.
|
1-4
|
5-9
|
11-14
|
15-17
|
18-20
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17
|
30
|
In the region’s description, they write clear and coherent information
about general facts (location, population, weather, lifestyle), where to go,
what to eat and what to do.
|
1-8
|
9-15
|
16-19
|
20-24
|
25-30
|
12
|
20
|
Produce some
structures worked in the course such as: (1) I am ____years old; (2)
sentences in simple present, e.g. I like reading___; (3) negative sentence e.g. I don’t like…; (4) use of
adjectives.
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1-4
|
5-9
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11-14
|
15-17
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18-20
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17
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10
|
Include
images, pictures, videos and visual aids that help readers understand the
information.
|
1-2
|
3-5
|
6-7
|
8
|
9-10
|
8
|
Comments: THERE
IS NOT INFORMATION ABOUT LOCATION, POPULATION,
WEATHER, LIFESTYLE, WHAT TO EAT AND WHAT TO DO. THE INTRODUCTION IS MISSING!
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Final score:____63_______
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Students’ names: marianela, ginet, brayam,
andres
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Date:
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%
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The members of the group:
Idabet Gallego Naranjo
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Poor
|
Needs improvement
|
Fair
|
Good
|
Outstanding
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Total
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20
|
Include
information about members’ profiles, region’s description
and an introduction of their blog.
|
1-4
|
5-9
|
11-14
|
15-17
|
18-20
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17
|
20
|
Write a
clear and coherent paragraph about their profiles.
|
1-4
|
5-9
|
11-14
|
15-17
|
18-20
|
17
|
30
|
In the region’s description, they write clear and coherent information
about general facts (location, population, weather, lifestyle), where to go,
what to eat and what to do.
|
1-8
|
9-15
|
16-19
|
20-24
|
25-30
|
15
|
20
|
Produce some
structures worked in the course such as: (1) I am ____years old; (2)
sentences in simple present, e.g. I like reading___; (3) negative sentence e.g. I don’t like…; (4) use of
adjectives.
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1-4
|
5-9
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11-14
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15-17
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18-20
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17
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10
|
Include
images, pictures, videos and visual aids that help readers understand the
information.
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1-2
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3-5
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6-7
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8
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9-10
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17
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Comments:
the profile is very good, but have mistakes; the information is small the
information is incomplet about the culture of the town is small
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Final score:____73_______
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http://
In the blog assigned I observed the following
mistakes:
In the
profile, the introduction and description there is not coherence in the
paragraph: there
is not punctuation, there are grammar mistakes and mix of capital letter and small letter in personal pronouns and proper nouns.
Example Profile:
My name is Carlos Andres Velez, I am 18 years
old, I am from Medellin Antioquia and I living in
Caldas municipality, I study civil engineering in
second semester at national university of Colombia, in my free time i like
to practice soccer, swimming, mountain biking and
at night I go out with my friends to dance. I am a sociable and
hardworking person, I like the sports and i
like to travel, among other things. maybe I am
missing many qualities for being a volunteer, but I have the attitude and i
like to help people, I am a good listener, I am an open minded person, I
like to listen to diferent ways of thinking,
and speak about my way of thinking, I like tu work
whit young people because I am a young
person and we could share likes, hobbies, etc. and
i enjoy to work with people from other
countries because i would like to know other
cultures.
Example Introduction:
Welcome to this blog and this city, MEDELLIN, in this site you will find information
about multiple aspects of medellin; the
location, climate, people, food, festivals, tourist sites, landscapes and
music.
We expect that this information will be useful for
you, that you take advantage of your stay in the city and enjoy the
activities that you can do.
again, welcome ! and enjoy this city!
again, welcome ! and enjoy this city!
Example Description:
Medellin have a population of 2.441.123 habitants and
1.398.877 habitants in the rest of the aburra
valley formed by the municipalities of Barbosa, Girardota, Copacabana,
Bello, Envigado, Itagüi, Sabaneta, La Estrella and Caldas.
The cordinate location
of medellin is 6° 14' 41" N 75°
34' 29" W. The city is located in the Andean region of Colombia in the
department of Antioquia, more specifically the valley of aburra.
Medellin is located in a mountainous area, between of the Central
Range, the city is known as the capital of the
mountain and is crossed from south to north for a river that born at the
highland of san miguel, known as medellin river that Change
name in the town of barbosa where it is
known as porse river.
The weather in Medellin is very uniform and it is
cold the most year, but in dicember and january,
and june and july
climate is warm, therefore Medellin
also it is known how the city of timeless spring
Rubric to evaluate writing
Date:
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%
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The members of the group are able to:
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Poor
|
Needs improvement
|
Fair
|
Good
|
Outstanding
|
Total
|
20
|
Include
information about members’ profiles, city’s profile and
introduce their blog.
|
1-4
|
5-9
|
11-14
|
15-17
|
18-20
|
17
|
20
|
Write a
clear and coherent paragraph about their profiles.
|
1-4
|
5-9
|
11-14
|
15-17
|
18-20
|
15
|
30
|
In the city’s profile, they write clear and coherent information about location, population,
landscape, weather, tourist attractions, food, music, sports, festivals, art
and religion.
|
1-8
|
9-15
|
16-19
|
20-24
|
25-30
|
24
|
20
|
Produce some
structures worked in the course such as: (1) I am ____years old; (2)
sentences in simple present, e.g. I like reading___; (3) negative sentence e.g. I don’t like…; (4) possessive
adjectives, e.g. Its capital is…
|
1-4
|
5-9
|
11-14
|
15-17
|
18-20
|
15
|
10
|
Include
images, pictures, videos and visual aids that help readers understand the
information.
|
1-2
|
3-5
|
6-7
|
8
|
9-10
|
10
|
Comments: I
think that your blog is good, because you explain every aspect about
Medellín, also you include many pictures to show the different customs of
this city. You should check your grammar in some paragraphs, and you must use
capital letter when it´s necessary.
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Final score:____81_____
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Grammar corrections:
Please check:
* i am from medellin antioquia and i
live in Caldas municipality, i am studying civil engineering
*The official currency is the
peso colombiano.
*The wather in medellin
is very uniform is cold the most year
*Medellin have beautiful places
*these are
By: Laura Tapias Múnera.
Rubric to evaluate writing
Students’ names:
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Date:
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%
|
The members of the group are able to:
|
Poor
|
Needs improvement
|
Fair
|
Good
|
Outstanding
|
Total
|
20
|
Include
information about members’ profiles, city’s profile and
introduce their blog.
|
1-4
|
5-9
|
11-14
|
15-17
|
18-20
|
9
|
20
|
Write a
clear and coherent paragraph about their profiles.
|
1-4
|
5-9
|
11-14
|
15-17
|
18-20
|
11
|
30
|
In the city’s profile, they write clear and coherent information about location, population,
landscape, weather, tourist attractions, food, music, sports, festivals, art
and religion.
|
1-8
|
9-15
|
16-19
|
20-24
|
25-30
|
13
|
20
|
Produce some
structures worked in the course such as: (1) I am ____years old; (2)
sentences in simple present, e.g. I like reading___; (3) negative sentence e.g. I don’t like…; (4) possessive
adjectives, e.g. Its capital is…
|
1-4
|
5-9
|
11-14
|
15-17
|
18-20
|
15
|
10
|
Include
images, pictures, videos and visual aids that help readers understand the
information.
|
1-2
|
3-5
|
6-7
|
8
|
9-10
|
3
|
Comments: You could include more
information about yourself by example your likes, why you want be volunteer,
also you can improve the image of your blog maybe you should include images
of Caldas, we think that in the introduction you should be more specific in
your ideas, in the description of your city you could include information
about places to were to go, thing to do, what is Caldas’s food?. Maybe you
could do a better blog.
We
recommendation is that you read and follow the guideline that we teachers
published in this link: http://unalmedculturalexchange.blogspot.com/p/blog-page.html
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Final score: 51
|
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Grammar corrections:
Never You mustn´t write thing like that: i am, i wanna…… if you wanna use the personal pronoun I “yo” is in a capital latter: I tell…
|
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Students’ names:
|
Date:
|
||||||
%
|
Poor
|
Needs improvement
|
Fair
|
Good
|
Outstanding
|
Total
|
|
20
|
Include
information about members’ profiles, city’s profile and
introduce their blog.
|
1-4
|
5-9
|
11-14
|
15-17
|
18-20
|
11
|
20
|
Write a
clear and coherent paragraph about their profiles.
|
1-4
|
5-9
|
11-14
|
15-17
|
18-20
|
14
|
30
|
In the city’s profile, they write clear and coherent information about location, population,
landscape, weather, tourist attractions, food, music, sports, festivals, art
and religion.
|
1-8
|
9-15
|
16-19
|
20-24
|
25-30
|
4
|
20
|
Produce some
structures worked in the course such as: (1) I am ____years old; (2)
sentences in simple present, e.g. I like reading___; (3) negative sentence e.g. I don’t like…; (4) possessive
adjectives, e.g. Its capital is…
|
1-4
|
5-9
|
11-14
|
15-17
|
18-20
|
8
|
10
|
Include
images, pictures, videos and visual aids that help readers understand the
information.
|
1-2
|
3-5
|
6-7
|
8
|
9-10
|
5
|
Comments:
We think that the blog is simple, you could improve the design and the
blog order, because some of the information is good, but it is not clear. Also
is important add another kind of information about landmarks, food, music, sports, festivals, art and religion.
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Final score:_____42 ___
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Rubric to evaluate writing
Students’ names: Lauras, Ana Maria, Alejandra Monsalve antioquiaplaces.blogspot.com
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Date:
|
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%
|
The members of the group are able to:
|
Poor
|
Needs improvement
|
Fair
|
Good
|
Outstanding
|
Total
|
20
|
Include
information about members’ profiles, city’s profile and
introduce their blog.
|
1-4
|
5-9
|
11-14
|
15-17
|
18-20
|
16
|
20
|
Write a
clear and coherent paragraph about their profiles.
|
1-4
|
5-9
|
11-14
|
15-17
|
18-20
|
14
|
30
|
In the city’s profile, they write clear and coherent information about location, population,
landscape, weather, tourist attractions, food, music, sports, festivals, art
and religion.
|
1-8
|
9-15
|
16-19
|
20-24
|
25-30
|
10
|
20
|
Produce some
structures worked in the course such as: (1) I am ____years old; (2)
sentences in simple present, e.g. I like reading___; (3) negative sentence e.g. I don’t like…; (4) possessive
adjectives, e.g. Its capital is…
|
1-4
|
5-9
|
11-14
|
15-17
|
18-20
|
13
|
10
|
Include
images, pictures, videos and visual aids that help readers understand the
information.
|
1-2
|
3-5
|
6-7
|
8
|
9-10
|
7
|
Comments antioquiaplaces.blogspot.com:
1.-you could write an introduction.
2.-you
should write more places of interest.
3.-you can
put more pictures of the region.
4.-you must
correct the structure of member profiles.
By:CartagenaBfcity.
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Final score:_____60______
|
|||||||
Students’ names: Andres Felipe Murcia Pabon
Roger
Beltran
Daniela Ramirez Espinosa
Hailton Stevens Daza Vahos
|
Date: 13 / 05 / 2014
|
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%
|
The members of the group are able to:
|
Poor
|
Needs improvement
|
Fair
|
Good
|
Outstanding
|
Total
|
20
|
Include
information about members’ profiles, city’s profile and
introduce their blog.
|
1-4
|
5-9
|
11-14
|
15-17
|
18-20
|
12
|
20
|
Write a clear
and coherent paragraph about their profiles.
|
1-4
|
5-9
|
11-14
|
15-17
|
18-20
|
17
|
30
|
In the city’s profile, they write clear and coherent information about location, population,
landscape, weather, tourist attractions, food, music, sports, festivals, art
and religion.
|
1-8
|
9-15
|
16-19
|
20-24
|
25-30
|
9
|
20
|
Produce some
structures worked in the course such as: (1) I am ____years old; (2)
sentences in simple present, e.g. I like reading___; (3) negative sentence e.g. I don’t like…; (4) possessive
adjectives, e.g. Its capital is…
|
1-4
|
5-9
|
11-14
|
15-17
|
18-20
|
15
|
10
|
Include
images, pictures, videos and visual aids that help readers understand the
information.
|
1-2
|
3-5
|
6-7
|
8
|
9-10
|
2
|
Comments:
-
The
introduction is very simple, is necessary that add more information about of
Medellín, for attract more attention in the people that read.
-
We
believe that your profiles are good.
-
The
information is very short, could add more about the music, festivals, sports,
characteristics of the population and landscape.
-
They
could add more information about the typical places and tourist attractions
as this is very important.
-
Would
be good to add more images, because the blog is very poor
-
The
information is understood, but the blog needs more pictures and colors
|
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 Final score:______55_____ |
|||||||
Date:
|
|||||||
%
|
Poor
|
Needs improvement
|
Fair
|
Good
|
Outstanding
|
Total
|
|
20
|
Include
information about members’ profiles, city’s profile and
introduce their blog.
|
1-4
|
5-9
|
11-14
|
15-17
|
18-20
|
11
|
20
|
Write a
clear and coherent paragraph about their profiles.
|
1-4
|
5-9
|
11-14
|
15-17
|
18-20
|
16
|
30
|
In the city’s profile, they write clear and coherent information about location, population,
landscape, weather, tourist attractions, food, music, sports, festivals, art
and religion.
|
1-8
|
9-15
|
16-19
|
20-24
|
25-30
|
26
|
20
|
Produce some
structures worked in the course such as: (1) I am ____years old; (2)
sentences in simple present, e.g. I like reading___; (3) negative sentence e.g. I don’t like…; (4) possessive
adjectives, e.g. Its capital is…
|
1-4
|
5-9
|
11-14
|
15-17
|
18-20
|
19
|
10
|
Include
images, pictures, videos and visual aids that help readers understand the
information.
|
1-2
|
3-5
|
6-7
|
8
|
9-10
|
8
|
Comments: You must
complete the Juan david’s profile there are not the all information. But the
grammar structure is good in the all paragraph in your blog. You could put
more picture.
In the introduction about the region is excellent because it’s most complete. Congratulation! But you could make it better. |
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Final score:________80___
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